In English, we are doing a film study on the movie zootopia. We did a presentation about it and now we have to write an essay. this is what i have written at the moment, I haven't finished. Here is my essay:
*please give me feedback*
Judy hopps is the main character in the movie zootopia written done by Byron Howard, Rich Moore. This movie is about animals.
In the first scene its a play. The play is showing that years ago predators hunted prey. Judy said, “we should all come together”. Judy was stating that predator should not hunt prey. Judy was stating how she thinks that we should all come together and then Gideon laughs at her saying that people will still hunt. Then they all stated what they wanted to be when they grew up, Judy said proudly “I want to be a police officer”. No one believed Judy and everyone laughed at her. I personally think that they were tryna to judge her and make assumptions. Judy was getting told that she could be a police officer because she was a bunny and even her parents said to her you should just be a carrot farmer, like your 275 siblings will be when they grow up. She ignored it. When Judy started getting older she started at the zootopia university.
Halfway through the movie, Judy starts to go on her adventure to finish her case. Judy was excited to have her first actual case. She didn't have much information on the victims/suspects but she believed in herself. The first person she went and saw was Nicholas Piberius Wilde (Nick Wilde for short). This is the second time nick was seen as a bad person. Nick was a hustler, he brought ice blocks from stores and made them into ice blocks of paws (which is unhygienic because no one knows if he washed his hands). Then he would take those ice blocks and go and sell them to lemmings (a type of animal).he named them pawpsicles. Judy hopps persuaded Nick to help her or she’ll turn him in.
In the end, Judy and Nick wilde become best friends and become partners against crime. Since nick helped judy with her case he got a job in the police force. When judy goes back into the police station she sees officer clawhauser in his place and she got super excited.
Great work, Chyna!
ReplyDeleteYour first paragraph is well-written. You have included a specific quote from the scene and talked about why you think it is important. You then moved on to telling more of the story (how she ignored what her parents said to her). You need to discuss why it is important, just like you did with The Play scene.
Also, you can improve your introduction by writing a RESPONSE TO THE QUESTION.
For example, if you are doing "Describe how a character changed" you would say "A character who changed is....."
Use the sentence starters to help with this!