My essay from social studies

We need the treaty to help everyone be safe. People weren’t the best in New Zealand and they had so many drunk people and they couldn’t control everyone. People also traded stuff to get other things this includes musket, food, and others. In this essay, I will be arguing that we needed. We needed this essay to help get everyone safer. 

In this paragraph, I am going to answer how the declaration of independence helped the Maori?

Interestingly, Maori need the treaty to be protected from the wars over new Zealand. For example, No one had control of New Zealand because it wasn’t owned at the time. There were so many fights and wars over new Zealand and Maori truly believed that they should have owned it. the impact/ effect of all of this is important because they needed the treaty to make a mutual agreement. The declaration would help make the agreement which would keep nearly everyone safe. They needed something to help them.

Musket wars were very dangerous. So many people died from musket wars, around about 20,000 people died. More laws would have had to come in contact with the treaty because it would help protect. Nga puhi and a few other northern tribes would have been the first to get muskets. They traded food, flax, and sometimes woman to get muskets. they traded everything they had to get muskets. Muskets were the only thing that Maori had to protect themselves. So much people died as I said above which wasn’t good. If people didn’t get into wars I think that we wouldn’t have gotten a treaty which means we wouldn’t exactly safe, so in conclusion, we are pretty lucky to have that important event happen, it’s sad that 20,000 people died. English men shouldn’t have brought guns 

The point is important because Maori were dying a lot and missionaries were worried about the Maori. For example, they were worried about more deaths and land loss, they thought a treaty would protect their safety, and they taught Maori how to read and write in Maori so they could fit in. they also put parts of the bible in Maori. they taught Maori what to believe and got a good relationship with them. They taught Maori new things like farming methods. they shouldn’t have made rights for everyone and if the death wasn’t caused by other people then they should have done something to try to keep everyone safe. In the bay of islands, Maori had at least 3000 transfers to Christianity. Maori brought a whole lot of land which also worried missionaries. They should have been protected anyway.

In this paragraph, I am tryna prove that whalers had very lawless behaviour. This point matters because there was a lot of prostitution and war. They acted very lawlessly, reckless and they needed the treaty to control all of the bad behaviours. For examples, there were a lot of drunks, fights, and a lot of prostitution after they came back from sailing for days. the sailors would throw partys to celebrate there trades and successes. When the partys were thrown people would get very drunk. Most of the partys/ celebrations would turn into brawl/ fight. Most sailors were very reckless. 

This is why I think we needed a treaty which did come into place in the end. Whalers were into prostitution, Maori wanted muskets to fight the other Maoris and English men, and missionaries were worried about Maori because they kept dying. The treaty helped everyone and made everything better. The treaty helped everyone, one way or another. This is why I think we needed a treaty.